Love Is Only A Word:

Well I understand the feelings your expressing the end of a,relationship is hard but also a new begining.
I would suggest that when your writing to try to feel the emotions you wish to express, write it down then look it over then work on the form and flow. Don't give up not everyone will like your work . Just keep writing

Nick

I wanted to read this mainly because of all the negative remarks; like I wanted to know what people were thinking about this piece and so much negativity. I actually thought the actual poem was pretty good! You do need to 'clean up' the writing but all in all; it's not so bad. I think you should continue writing and I think it's a good outlet for you and a place to put your pain. Good luck...

I like this, i can relate. - Lee

but it is good as ive said before and i do like it but there is a big age gap

well i dont think this is very good and i agree with dayani for once this is well like a 16 year old wrote it....

BTGE, if you're constantly failing, it's because you undertake your emotional adventures with failure the uppermost thing in your mind, making failure the road events you're involved in are most likely to take. Don't even entertain the word, failure. Just ig it! And make it clear that every project you start, has only one possible conclusion: 100% spectacular success, every single time : )

Typos. Sorry.

You are not, and therefore shouldn't sound like it.

I didn't mean to write "today" twice in one clause, I just rewrote part of it and didn't change the beginning. Oops.

Excuse me for being blunt, but I'm constantly being told I'm rude when I'm trying to help people improve, and so I'm just going to say it.

BehindTheseGreenEyes, you're full of ****, as Pretty so eloquently pointed out.

You contradict yourself, your poems are not particularly poetic and, often enough, the content makes you look like a 16 year old slut.

You are ont, and therefore you shouldn't sound like it.
It makes you look dreadful.

You can't spell, you can't take criticism and you can't take the time to edit your work, even after its flaws have been pointed out.

You are petulant, childish and irritating.

I've had it up to here with people starting churlish little flame wars with me because their poems weren't brilliant and I told them so (and generally how to fix it, though I've given up with a few of you). You make me ill, and I'm sick of it.

I signed in today to eighteen new mails today, all from people like you, who cannot take criticism and don't edit their work, then get offended when I tell them they misspelled something.

You're a grown woman, for god's sake. You have no excuse for being churlish, ignorant, ill mannered or rude.

I've written more than I intended to, and I'd delete it, except almost everyone to whom this ought be directed reads and loves your "poetry". So I think I'll leave it there, for everyone to see.

Oh, and before you tell me I'm childish, I'm fifteen years old. If I get to be petulant and pathetic at any point in my life, it's now.

What's your excuse?

44 of your 60 poems have colons at the end of the titles. It does look bad, and it's obviously not an error. If it was, you would have fixed it, and there wouldn't be so many.

What makes you think the people of this site are supposed to understand? This is a place for poetry, not support. I'd also like to point out that you yourself said you wrote this because you were bored, not because you were feeling broken hearted and needed to let your emotions out. You were bored. That's it.

And I'm having a hard time figuring out why you can't put spaces in between words and punctuation marks.
Poets put effort into their work, you know. They put their heart and soul into their work, they check and edit their work, and if someone has a suggestion as to how they can improve, they listen. And they improve.

Thankx to everyone for your comment,good and bad.For the last comment,I must of hit the wrong key from going so fast,and it's people like u that makes our fellow poets feel like ****.If u can't find anything to say to make a person that's broken feel alittle better,then stop commenting!I can get your **** at home!I don't need it from people who suppose to understand.