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into you like a train

i'm into you like a train
and you can't foresee the internal
damage.

like a venous bleed, you're
always there, but it's not enough
for this sucking chest wound.

gasping for air, they scream
in horror, so much
blood.

red reminders, we don't have
much time.

why don't you call 911?

breaths don't go in, start compressions
you've lost me by the time the sirens arrive.

ribs don't do you much good
when the heart's exposed.

by eyesdecieve
posted on 10/11/2007

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Comments: 10

Comment by LeoisAndo: Mar 16, 2011 2:57 pm
I liked the beginning. It was strong but I felt it slowed down towards the end.
Comment by SisterofDarkness: Apr 16, 2009 9:48 am
ok for some reason...that person bothers me? idk...
Comment by Holychild: Apr 11, 2009 1:14 am
good poem but so much pain.

Jesus is at ur side.
Love&PeaceSmiley
Comment by SisterofDarkness: Feb 6, 2009 10:25 am
Jessi's right..it's really hard to describe but amazing...hooray for saRA!!
Comment by trueblessings: Dec 26, 2008 6:47 pm
Great... love it...
Comment by amyjohnson: Nov 27, 2008 11:37 am
nice Smiley and sad Sad face
Comment by brokenXbruisedXbleeding: Feb 16, 2008 9:21 pm
this is an amazing poem
Comment by Reece: Jan 6, 2008 6:21 am
I agree with tears. its good, deep and emotional. Good work
Comment by tearsofrain: Oct 12, 2007 4:19 pm
wow. interesting. its like back and forth from relaty and fantasy. like. a mix of metaphor and symbolism. so deep, but almost shalloww... ha. i never know how to describe ur poems
Comment by Lawrence13: Oct 11, 2007 8:31 am
I love the 1st bit!

"i'm into you like a train
and you can't foresee the internal
damage."

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