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Poet's Frustration

I write and write,
The inner workings a beautiful idea.
Not that anyone reads, what takes them any effort.

Canít you see?
I am screaming, screaming to the empty minds,
Of a dizzy twisted world.

Dark in ignorant souls.
Light in lurid faces.
Canít you people see?

Dark, light, dark, light.
Nothing but surface illusion.
Only children believe the absolutes,
Only fools cling to them.

The world is rainbow gray.
And you, my friends, are blind.

by Styrmwolf
posted on 05/17/2007

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Comments: 10

Comment by oldman: May 30, 2007 11:03 pm
Wolfdreamer poem was previous. There is the core to this energy. The piece is very complex and crafted, yet few took time to read or comment. I think I am on target here. funny though as you let steam out then most relate to that. I will say this I wrote a piece that imo had depth and one would have to have learned a great deal about the world, history, mythology etc... but not one comment ever. Over everyone's head or awareness I guess. Then I have to realize I am in a forum with some young as 13. What can an old fart expect?
Comment by oldman: May 30, 2007 10:56 pm
Ummmm. let it out!
Comment by SisterofDarkness: May 23, 2007 9:57 am
but Whitney...I read everything you write!!!

but seriously...this is a very amazing poem...and true...I know just how you feel...sort of...;)
Comment by Styrmwolf: May 18, 2007 4:59 pm
Thanks all. ^^
Comment by Wezmonkey: May 18, 2007 9:43 am
as odd as the poem sounds... its really kinda true... I like it...
Comment by childrenofthenight: May 17, 2007 8:59 pm
i simply enjoyed and favored the last two.
Comment by Styrmwolf: May 17, 2007 6:18 pm
Thanks guys.

Yeah, it just came from me being annoyed at how some poorly done but short and simple works that deal with a favorite theme around here get fawned over endlessly, while poems that are really deep, thoughtful and original seem to be ignored. And no, I'm not just talking about mine, it's just what I noticed in general..sigh
Comment by tearsofrain: May 17, 2007 5:55 pm
wowness with the mind reading. im so sick of people not reading stuff because they're mind can't handle it. i admit i do that, but i go back later when my mind osnt fried, ya know? grr it's crazy. and i get the whole gray thing. im so bored with life right now... blah i loved the beginging of hs cause it was new and exciting. now its... not. haha. excelent word choice tearsofrain. any way what im trying to get at: I AGREE
Comment by floating: May 17, 2007 3:32 pm
Know how you feel all too well. However also know the trick is to learn how to establish relevance. Then they do listen and you feel better and they become aware of something they weren't aware of before. You've captured the feeling well here, prompting me to respond to your message rather than comment on the poem per se. Well done! (IMHO)

Comment by lostandlonely: May 17, 2007 3:12 pm
wow...amazingly simple but soo intrancing...very controlled and there is much depth and intelligence put into it...great job! ~Amber~

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