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Bite Me

I hate the way
They watch you as we walk
Somewhere simple.

I never spent even
One second watching them watch you
Before,
But now their sight
Is in every second we're out.

It must have always been that way.

And I know what they think,
But they cannot have you
Since your bottom lip fits between my
Teeth

And not theirs.

by Atwood
posted on 08/21/2011

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Comments: 3

Comment by Atwood: Mar 9, 2012 11:59 am
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Comment by xJeskaDollx: Aug 21, 2011 4:10 pm
Oh and as an afterthought, I don't think I read the title before reading and commenting, but I love that as well. Clever and enticing. That's all. Again really excellent write.
Comment by xJeskaDollx: Aug 21, 2011 4:08 pm
I loved this. The simple wording almost made it more elegant and the ending was absolutely perfect.

"And I know what they think,
But they cannot have you
Since your bottom lip fits between my
Teeth

And not theirs."

Easily read, it definitely has a certain charm about it. Nice work

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