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Blank

White is no way to look at the world.
Unsullied,pristine and stark
is not a truth,
not any more,
not now that we know nothing
is no proof as to the absence of anything.

Since Physics has provided cause without effect;
emptiness, still contains dark excesses.
Blank pages are pulp tundras
awaiting the infrastructure of words,
visible atoms layered upon atoms unrecognised,
unnoticed...not understood.
Soft keystrokes of code reassembling as prose,
like star static in the background,
-we see what we feel
-we form what we think.

If I had my way I would interpose lines
upon every snowflake;
make them truly unique.
Each soft pale nimbus that mars
a sky so blue it may have spilled from a billion irises,
would fill to a thunderhead of translation,
a storm of interpretation.

Everyone would now know
without further explanation
what was writ within the soul
of us all.
At night the stars would spell out the spaces between covenants,
the moon would wilt
and secrets would be shared...

and be the only true nothing left.


by Atavist
posted on 03/19/2014

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Comments: 6

Comment by PoeticPrincess: Apr 18, 2014 6:44 am
That imagery in the second and third stanza, just wow! Perfection is staring me in the face, I'm jealous.
Comment by xJeskaDollx: Apr 7, 2014 7:33 pm
"Each soft pale nimbus that mars
a sky so blue it may have spilled from a billion irises,
would fill to a thunderhead of translation,
a storm of interpretation." Love that. You've definitely still got it!
Comment by prettyspl: Mar 24, 2014 12:24 pm
Love the way you use words; first stanza my favorite but they all say so much and mean something different to all. Vote
(miss your comments and hopefully soon, you'll find time for a lesson).
Comment by IsabelleLockhart: Mar 22, 2014 10:09 pm
I don't know if I would call this awkward... I mean it does have a bit of an unease to it, but - with the science imagery - it works in almost a quirky charm. I actually quite enjoyed this piece and am in agreement with Favorite the mute: "Star static" is some beautiful alliteration. I also love the smoothness to the line, "Soft keystrokes of code reassembling as prose." The only line that stood out as off-rhythm was "At night the stars would spell out the spaces between covenants." Perhaps break it into two? That is my only suggestion. Great write as always. You're one of my favorite poets on this site. Smiley Vote.
Comment by FavoriteTheMute: Mar 20, 2014 10:21 pm
"Star static..."

I like that.
Comment by lexiedanielle: Mar 19, 2014 11:23 am
So deep. I wish to become this good. <3

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