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Spliting hairs with a dollar bill

You talk at me,
speaking of travels, money,
and all things gold

I can hear the coins falling from your lips
shiny, meaningless, and flat

If you could purchase the sun,
would you let my fair skin boil?
or charge the lilies for their supper?

My thoughts are feeble
to the ways of riches,
as I listen through brick walls

you taste your echoes
with swollen dreams
and those seeds from the bitter meat
take refuge in the gaps of your grin

I feel cheap for not wanting more,
my dreams, lazy and anorexic
coddle the white flag at the bottom
of the steep stairs,
not even looking up

my mind bloats
with the fumes of your thirst,
as we sit taunting the silence
on the wrong side of tomorrow


by SilentWords
posted on 07/07/2013

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Comments: 16

Comment by inkblot: Sep 4, 2015 7:23 am
The first five lines are a perfect follow through from the title. Which is **** hot, btw.
Lines 6,7,8 and 9,10,11, have images that pop out at you like an insect in the eyeball.

And I get lost in the rhythm of the last three verses. Mind bloats/side of/tomorrow at the end there, is also bloody perfect.

Taste may be the enemy of art, but I can't find a flaw here. No loose threads to pull.

**** ****ing hot. I'll just leave this two year late comment right here...
Comment by MrGrunty: Feb 11, 2014 7:11 pm
Stopped by to request that you empty your mailbox and got to read this again.

You have real talent you know.
Comment by darksideofme: Feb 3, 2014 4:19 am
Money is a necessary evil
and those indifferent to it are bound to be crushed by its power

That being said, the wording in this was flawless. Everyone on here is still so good. I've got a lot of catching up to do.
Comment by Venivik: Dec 30, 2013 3:45 am
Smiley
My thoughts are feeble
to the ways of riches,
as I listen through brick walls

So perfectly said about what I'm struggling to overcome myself.
Comment by LucidChimp: Oct 6, 2013 6:59 am
"I can hear the coins falling from your lips
shiny, meaningless, and flat"

Stands out to me.
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Comment by MrGrunty: Sep 25, 2013 10:03 am
The wrong side of tomorrow.....

DAMN!

vote
Comment by google: Sep 4, 2013 12:22 pm
WOW
very good

Comment by FavoriteTheMute: Sep 2, 2013 10:04 pm
Your work now seems more mature and worldly. You can continue to evolve as an artist. Fascinating.
Comment by nocturnus: Jul 16, 2013 4:40 am
my mind bloats
with the fumes of your thirst,
as we sit taunting the silence
on the wrong side of tomorrow

Mind blowing poem...One of my favorites so far Smiley
Comment by prettyspl: Jul 12, 2013 10:50 pm
Yes; I agree with others that it is wonderful to see you post again. It's been a while since I've read any of your work. I was gone for a while and might have missed a few .. time to catch up because your poetry is some of the best on this site. Love this as I do all your poetry. Vote

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